（2016•黄浦区一模）假设你校英语报就" 我心中的偶像（Idol in my heart）" 展开征文活动，你对该话题很感兴趣，拟投稿．你的短文必须包含以下内容：
1．谁是你心中的偶像？
2．你为什么会崇拜他（她）？
3．结合一个具体事例说明偶像在你成长过程中对你的影响．
【考点】应用文；提纲类．
【分析】首先，仔细审题，本文要写的是一个人，并且是你的偶像．内容是三方面：偶像是谁，崇拜他的原因以及具体事例说明影响．写作时态为一般过去时，兼顾一般现在时．人称以第一和第三人称为主．因此必需将文章分成三大部分：
1．引出偶像其人
通过最高级+定语从句相结合的形式来引出自己的偶像：中文老师，句式较为复杂，开门见山且让人眼前一亮．
2．崇拜他的理由和具体事例
正文部分的第一句要注意过渡，从偶像其人过渡到崇拜原因，使用了一个表语从句来承上启下，流畅自然，引出下面三点理由．在分析理由的过程中，使用first of all，second ，finally 等自然连接，同时灵活使用with 结构、定语从句、分词作状语等，是内容与形式融为一体．
3．总结全文
最后用一个分词结构和一个虚拟语气的倒装句来结束全文，简洁自然．
重要短语：
set example for sb为某人树立榜样；long for渴望，盼望；with great eagerness热切地；arouse one's interest in doing sth引起某人做某事的兴趣；gaine much in college在大学期间收获如此之多
高分句型：
1．Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．本句中含有一个who 引导的定语从句，修饰先行词teacher ．
2．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．本句中not only …but also…引导的两个句子时，not only后面的句子用部分倒装结构．
3．I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．本句中是属于强调谓语动词的句型，由助动词do 强调谓语．
4．Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college ．本句中为省略了if 用倒装结构的虚拟条件句，是对过去事实的假设．
【解答】Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．（引出话题）（高分句型）
What often brings back memories of my school teacher is his special qualities．First of all，I was attracted by his wit．I remember we always long for his class with great eagerness because his lecture were humorous，never failing to make us laugh loud．Second ，he gave us the greatest gift a teacher can offer﹣﹣an awakening of a passion for learning．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．（高分句型）Finally ，I was deeply impressed by the respect he showed for us，for he treated us like friends rather than students．
Considering all the above﹣mentioned merits of Martin，I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．（高分句型）Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college．（高分句型）（阐述影响）
【点评】总的来说，我们在写人和事相结合的文章时，一定要认真分析所给的信息提示，准确审题，灵活运用所学英语知识，采用不同个表达方式将要点表达清楚．在分析人物性格的过程中，以具体事例为例，以增强文章的说服力．
（2016•黄浦区一模）假设你校英语报就" 我心中的偶像（Idol in my heart）" 展开征文活动，你对该话题很感兴趣，拟投稿．你的短文必须包含以下内容：
1．谁是你心中的偶像？
2．你为什么会崇拜他（她）？
3．结合一个具体事例说明偶像在你成长过程中对你的影响．
【考点】应用文；提纲类．
【分析】首先，仔细审题，本文要写的是一个人，并且是你的偶像．内容是三方面：偶像是谁，崇拜他的原因以及具体事例说明影响．写作时态为一般过去时，兼顾一般现在时．人称以第一和第三人称为主．因此必需将文章分成三大部分：
1．引出偶像其人
通过最高级+定语从句相结合的形式来引出自己的偶像：中文老师，句式较为复杂，开门见山且让人眼前一亮．
2．崇拜他的理由和具体事例
正文部分的第一句要注意过渡，从偶像其人过渡到崇拜原因，使用了一个表语从句来承上启下，流畅自然，引出下面三点理由．在分析理由的过程中，使用first of all，second ，finally 等自然连接，同时灵活使用with 结构、定语从句、分词作状语等，是内容与形式融为一体．
3．总结全文
最后用一个分词结构和一个虚拟语气的倒装句来结束全文，简洁自然．
重要短语：
set example for sb为某人树立榜样；long for渴望，盼望；with great eagerness热切地；arouse one's interest in doing sth引起某人做某事的兴趣；gaine much in college在大学期间收获如此之多
高分句型：
1．Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．本句中含有一个who 引导的定语从句，修饰先行词teacher ．
2．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．本句中not only …but also…引导的两个句子时，not only后面的句子用部分倒装结构．
3．I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．本句中是属于强调谓语动词的句型，由助动词do 强调谓语．
4．Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college ．本句中为省略了if 用倒装结构的虚拟条件句，是对过去事实的假设．
【解答】Perhaps the most vital idol in my life is my Chinese teacher Martin who has set many examples for me during my studying time．（引出话题）（高分句型）
What often brings back memories of my school teacher is his special qualities．First of all，I was attracted by his wit．I remember we always long for his class with great eagerness because his lecture were humorous，never failing to make us laugh loud．Second ，he gave us the greatest gift a teacher can offer﹣﹣an awakening of a passion for learning．Not only did he lead us to an appreciation of the beauty and perfection of Chinese and literature，but also aroused our great interest in exploring something deeper in this field．（高分句型）Finally ，I was deeply impressed by the respect he showed for us，for he treated us like friends rather than students．
Considering all the above﹣mentioned merits of Martin，I do feel so happy to have her as my teacher．（高分句型）Had it not been his wit advice and positive influence on me，I would not have gained so much in college．（高分句型）（阐述影响）
【点评】总的来说，我们在写人和事相结合的文章时，一定要认真分析所给的信息提示，准确审题，灵活运用所学英语知识，采用不同个表达方式将要点表达清楚．在分析人物性格的过程中，以具体事例为例，以增强文章的说服力．